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I've always been uncertain of my writing, but I think with the changes my editor made, I'll have a better chance getting into my top choice. I was very confused about what admissions officers are looking for in the essay, so it was nice to have an editor who knew what to include and what to take out. He helped me emphasize the stronger parts of my essay and remove the cliched parts.
Your edits hugely improved my the verbiage and flow of my essay while leaving its core idea intact. I really appreciate it!